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Writing Samples
Band 4

Many students find it harder to study at university or college compared to when they were in school. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, the majority of educators suggest that it is more challenging to
study
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at
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in
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 campus life or college than
school
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in school
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.
This
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 issue consists of several reasons and has a number of solutions that can be tackled. From my perspective, the complexity of academic materials and
financial
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 can be basic points for
students
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. On the one hand, studying at educational institutions is able to open up numerous opportunities. One of the main
reason
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 is that the academic resources make a
difficulty
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 to understand easily. Because, previously, those who
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study
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 at school did not
witnessed
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such
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 kinds of sources.
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, educators might get stressed, reducing the curiosity of
university
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 education.
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, adaptability to the atmosphere quickly can be
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 notion for some
students
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.
Secondly
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, most
students
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 claim that it is harder to
study
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 at
university
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 or college because of
finance
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finances
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. Namely,
all
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not all
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 people do not have the opportunity to enter tertiary.
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, they
bound
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 to earn money to
provide
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cover
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 their
expenditure
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 except
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university
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for university
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.
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 might origin difficulties for
students
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,
which
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 they can not strike a balance between
study
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 and work.
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, there are numerous solutions to tackle these problems.
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, it will be much better if governments
organize
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 a number of several ways to facilitate
the
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apply
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academics.
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, parents play a crucial role
to solve
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in solving
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 financial
issue
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issues
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that they should assist
for
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apply
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their children
.
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with.
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 In conclusion, many learners find it
challenge
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challenging
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 to
study
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 at
university
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 or college because of the problems with academic materials and
economically
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economic issues
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. Governments and parents should
aid
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help
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students
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to
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develop themselves.

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task response
The essay talks about the problem but ideas are not fully clear. Add a clear thesis in the first part and give 2-3 strong points with simple examples for each. Keep a short conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence and cohesion
Link parts with easy words. Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use linking words like 'first', 'but', 'also', 'therefore' to show the flow.
strength
The writer starts to discuss both causes and ways to help.
strength
There is a basic form of essay with an intro, body and conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university
  • college
  • students
  • school
  • study
  • workload
  • freedom
  • routine
  • home
  • distractions
  • pressure
  • success
  • social life
  • stress
  • focus
  • skills
  • understanding
  • assignments
  • difficulties
  • balance
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