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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
The circle graphs compare
marital
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the marital
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 status of various
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population
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populations
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 in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the majority of people in both countries are married;
while
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Canada
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’s
population
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 provide a negligible amount
at
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of
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 same sex marriage. Looking at married people, more than half of
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population
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the population
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 are separated but not divorced in
Canada
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. Compared to
Australia
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, those just over 40%. Most of
Australia
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’s
population
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are
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is
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 married,
represent
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representing
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 46% and
receive
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receives
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 the highest proportions.
In contrast
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, those in
Canada
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just
Verb problem
are just
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 under 30%. The widowed and single
population
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account
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accounts
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 for 7% identically in
Canada
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.
Similarly
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, the gap
of
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between
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 them only
diverge
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diverges
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 by 1%. Both
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 have not over 15% in terms of
those
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their
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population
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. Followed by
divorced
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the divorced
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population
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, the figures for
Australia
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 and
Canada
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 form the
least
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lowest
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 percentages, at 2% and 1% respectively. Particularly, there are few people
live
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living
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 in
the
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apply
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same sex marriage status
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 only
emerge
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emerges
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 in
Canada
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, at 3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • married
  • single
  • never married
  • divorced
  • widowed
  • Canada
  • Australia
  • pie chart
  • share
  • part
  • percentage
  • largest
  • smallest
  • many
  • most
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • different
  • both
  • also
  • but
  • and
  • in contrast
  • overall
  • pattern
  • trend
  • reason
  • cause
  • because
  • due to
  • people
  • age
  • culture
  • society
  • explain
  • compare
  • conclude
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