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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The outlined line chart gives information on the comparison of
item’s
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 transported in the UK over a period of 28
years
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 from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, it is
apparently
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 that there were significant changes in
form
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 of transportation. It can be seen from the level of the
statistic
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in
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 the Road tends to hold the highest position in
four
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the four
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 categories.
In contrast
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, Pipeline has the lowest position of all,
while
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 the Water and Rail jumped slightly. In Road, there was a considerable growth in the number of goods transported
about
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 26.58 units
between
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, between
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 1974 and
1990
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1990,
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then
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go
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 up rapidly in the next more than
a
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decade. In 1974, Water started at around 40 ratios
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then
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climb
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 gradually to 1982
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 it
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 to stay the same for the next ten
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. The peak was an increase of about 4 data
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 2002. From the graph,
it is clear that
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 the digit of Rail did not change much during the
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 1974 to 2002, increasing by only 1 unit. In terms of Pipeline, it witnessed a moderate escalation from nearly zero to 20 million tonnes by 1982.
This
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then
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stabilized
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 for eight
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 before
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levelling off at exactly 20 million tonnes, but it had a slight dip in 1994.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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