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The increasing reliance on personalized AI assistants for daily tasks is becoming more prevalent. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's contemporary world, it is common to face
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 daily tasks that
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 by AI assistants.
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 some people think that it is beneficial for society, I personally believe that
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 to detrimental consequences, the drawbacks exceed the advantages.  On the one hand, modernisation
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 people to be more
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 on technology and digital devices.
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faciliation
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facilitation
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availability
 and convenience of doing tasks, getting information immediately without waiting and putting too much effort
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 them via AI
tools
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, created excessive reliance and reduced
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 memory retention, comprehension and analytical thinking skills.
According to
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 research contributed by Trinity College Dublin, the number of students that doing their tasks with AI programs excessively increased within five years, after
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 of AI assistants
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 from an educational
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 created cognitive slowing.
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 of AI
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 job opportunities, as almost every task can be done with the help of artificial machines.  Moving
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, some members of society assert that
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 and innovation of Artificial Intelligence give people
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 to work on multiple jobs, though with the help of
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tools,
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 individuals do not have to be qualified
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 job field.
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students
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 can work remotely on different jobs,
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a consultant
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 by copying and pasting
informations
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information
 from digital assistants.
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 of technological development
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 us to learn to work with AI
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, as
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.  In conclusion, despite the fact that technological advancement
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 our daily life with the support of Artificial Intelligence, I personally believe that its catastrophic consequences-
incuding
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including
 loss of memory, thinking ability, and reduction of job opportunities- outweigh the advantages.

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planning
Plan before you write. Make a short plan with 2-3 main ideas and a simple example for each idea.
language
Use short, clear sentences. Check word order and spelling. Avoid long or confusing lines.
task
Answer the question directly. Say your view in the intro and end with it in the conclusion.
task response
The writer shows a clear view that the drawbacks weigh more than the good in the end.
coherence
The essay mentions why AI can affect work and memory.
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