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Band 4.5

An old car was left on the street near your street several weeks ago. The car is now causing a problem for residents. Write a letter to the Council. In your letter: Describe the car Outline the problems it is causing Tell the Council what you want them to do about it You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Councilor,

Dear
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, Hope
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 letter finds you well and in good health.
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 am writing
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 letter to express our situation about an old car that was left in our street several weeks ago. I tell you about the description of it, as it is a small black vehicle , a 2007 model, full of
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dust. On the left side of the car, there are some marks , and the back door of it was broken.
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 car was parked in the specific parking spaces for two weeks , and residents can not find a place to park their cars , so they are forced to park in another place .So,they waste a lot of time finding their cars in the morning when they go to
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work. All of us want
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you to take
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action towards
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 case. We hope you find the owner of
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 vehicle.In
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 case, people will find a place for their motors and increase
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 value
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 the community. I wish
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 issue
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 a priority for you and
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 your attention. I am eagerly waiting for
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 from your side. Yours sincerely, Ezz.

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task response
The letter has all three tasks, but be clearer about what action you want and by when.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph; start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
coherence
Use linking words like first, also, then to show how ideas go together.
language
Fix grammar and spelling: capitalize I and proper nouns, and end sentences with a full stop.
tone
Keep a formal and polite tone throughout the letter.
task response
The letter states the problem and asks for action, which meets the task.
tone
There is a closing line and polite tone.
structure
The letter shows respect to the council and a wish to resolve the issue.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car
  • old
  • street
  • problems
  • residents
  • parking
  • valuable
  • safety
  • hazard
  • children
  • play
  • spot
  • frustration
  • community
  • eyesore
  • aesthetic
  • value
  • appealing
  • nearby
  • weeks
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