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Do you know that now a days many people don't do enough physical exercises. Give the causes for this problem and give solutions to solve it.

Do you know that nowadays many
people
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 don'
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 do enough physical
exercise
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People
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 who don'
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 do that have many causes , but
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 there are more and more solutions for it. There are many causes for
people
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 who don'
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 do enough
exercise
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the bad weather in some countries.Kuwait is one of the countries that has
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hot weather even at night.
People
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 who live in it can'
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 even go for a walk without getting a sunburn. Second,most grown-up
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 have enough time for
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 in some countries takes
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 hours per week
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People
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 like to
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 in the morning.But
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 the grone
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 can'
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,
people
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 nowadays are lazy and wouldn'
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 do any
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.One of the reasons that
people
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 are lazy is the unhealthy food.
People
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 come from their
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 tired and lazy.
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, there are some solutions for that.
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work
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 out at home and at gyms. That way
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people
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, people
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 can
exercise
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 at any time.
People
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 will forget about the weather and the rain. Second,if
people
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 start organic there time they'll have cable of hours .Many
people
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 go to sleep after
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until 8pm.Some
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 like to
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 after
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, getting enough sleep will help
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 at
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 and
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.Many doctors say that sleeping well anchors body power.
People
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work
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 out because they don'
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 have enough power for it. In the end, physical exercises are not as hard as
people
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 think. Don'
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 start with pull-ups up but
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 start with waking. In my opinion any anyone can
work
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 out and be a gymnast.

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structure
Plan the essay with clear parts: intro, causes, solutions, and a short end.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph and link the ideas with simple words.
content
Add more detail and real facts to back up ideas.
language
Fix grammar and spell; use full sentences.
content
Be clear about time and numbers: e.g., '50 hours a week' and 'weather can stop walks'.
strength
Two main parts: causes and fixes are clear.
strength
You give some real examples, like weather and long work hours.
strength
There is a closing line that finishes the text.

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