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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the levels of
waste
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 produced by three organisations (A,
B
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, and
C
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) between 2000 and 2015, measured in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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,
while
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company
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 A and
company
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B
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 experienced a decline in
waste
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 output over the period of 15 years,
company
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C
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 showed
oa
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an
 upward trend, with
company
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C
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 recording the highest amount by 2015. In 2000,
company
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 A made up 12
tonnes
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 of
waste
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 produced, the most among all groups,
whereas
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company
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B
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 and
C
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 accounted for approximately 8 and 4
tonnes
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 of
waste
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, respectively. Organisation A saw a steady decrease over the period, reaching 8
tonnes
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 in 2015.
Similarly
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, organisation
B
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 rose to
peak
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a peak
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at
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of
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 10
tonnes
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 in 2005, before falling sharply to almost 3
tonnes
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, which was the lowest point over the period shown in 2015.
In contrast
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,
company
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C
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,
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apply
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 witnessed an increase consistently to six
waste
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 in
tonnes
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 by 2005. After five years, the amount of
waste
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 grew gradually to seven
tonnes
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, and by the
last
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 year
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, recording
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recording
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it recorded
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 the greatest amount of
waste
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 at 10
tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, b, c, tonnes, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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