Social media such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram has replaced face-to-face communication in our everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages.

Today I will discuss how social media ,
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as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram, have replaced face-to-face communication in our everyday life. The advantage of
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development . First, life is easy , and the person can learn from it.
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, they will communicate with the other person very quickly.
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, shopping is easier than in the past.
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, there is more benefit in social media. The disadvantage of
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development .
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the people will be lazy.
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, the person will not gather.
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, the ayes for the children will cause damage.
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, the advantage of
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development outweighs its disadvantages.

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improvement
Make the view clear. State if you think advantages or disadvantages are stronger and say it in the last sentence of your essay.
structure
Use clear paragraphs. Have an intro, a body for advantages, a body for disadvantages, and a short conclusion.
example
Give real examples for each point. For example, say how social media helps talk to friends far away, or how it may hurt real meet ups.
strength
The topic is stated in the first sentence.
strength
There are some linking words like First and Moreover.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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