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The maps below show changes in the Spanish city of Castèllon in recent times.

The maps below show changes in the Spanish city of Castèllon in recent times.
The map illustrates
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 changes happened
the
Change preposition
in the
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 city of Spain called Castellon in recent years.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
town
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the town
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 has undergone radical transformations in the sector of public infrastructures and
become
Verb problem
has become
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 more eco-friendly throughout the period. In detail, the location of
university
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the university
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 remained constant,
while
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 new facilities
added
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were added
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 nearby for residents,
such
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 as
hall
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a hall
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 on the left side and
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 shopping centre on the right side.
Moreover
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, the metro station
replaced
Verb problem
was replaced
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 with the police station, and placed between
university
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the university
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 and
city
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the city
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 centre. Moving
further
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, entertainment amenities including cinema, bars and clubs
added
Verb problem
were added
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on
Change preposition
to
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harbour
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the harbour
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.
Although
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 trees
demolished
Verb problem
were demolished
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,
main
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the main
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 road
allocated
Verb problem
was allocated
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 to the zone for pedestrians and bicycle rental area constructed for alternate vehicle usage and
become
Wrong verb form
became
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more
Correct article usage
a more
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 greenery environment.
Also
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,
old
Correct article usage
the old
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 market
chains
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chains'
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 location changed to the left side of the central area and improved by being covered. The new shopping centre added to the empty place of
old
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the old
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 market retail.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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