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The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the amount of
sales
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 of three
books
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 (
children’s
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books
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,
adult
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fiction
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, and educational
books
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) in a particular country from 2002 to 2006, measured in
million
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dollars
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.
Overall
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,
while
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adult
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fiction
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 experienced a decline in
sales
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 over the period of five years,
children’s
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 and educational
books
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 showed an upward
trends
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trend
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, with
children’s
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books
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 recording the highest
sales
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 by 2006. In 2002, 45
million
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dollars
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 accounted for
adult
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fiction
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, the most among all three kinds, followed by
children’s
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books
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 at just over 30
million
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dollars
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 and
education
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the education
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 kind with approximately 25
million
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dollars
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.
Adult
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fiction
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 dropped to almost 40 by 2004.
This
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 amount continued to
fell
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 in the next two
year
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years
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, reaching 30
million
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dollars
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 in 2006. Regarding educational
books
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 witnessed an increase in
sales
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 from 25 in the first year to about 30
million
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dollars
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 in 2003, before
felling
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 to 25
million
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dollars
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 in 2005. After 2005, the
sales
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 recovered to slightly above 30
million
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dollars
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 in the final year. It was overtaking the educational kind.
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,
children’s
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books
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 increased consistently over the period shown, peaking at 55
million
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dollars
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 in 2006. It was
outnumbering
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both
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by both
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 of the other kinds.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, books, children’s, adult, fiction, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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