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some individual think having a good teacher is important for academic success .while other people think it is the attitude of the child . discuss both the views and give your opinion.

There are several factors when it comes to
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academical
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 success of the
student
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. Some individuals are of the notion that it depends on the knowledge and skills of the professor;
whereas
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,
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other
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others
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 believe that it depends on the
mind frame
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mindset
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 of the learner. I believe that it depends upon the thinking and the perspective of the scholars. I have discussed both
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opinions in the ensuing paragraphs. On one hand, educators are considered responsible for
students
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students'
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 success.
This
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 is because it is said that
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student
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students
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 would learn from what they would see.
Moreover
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, if the instructor has
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good knowledge and
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skills,
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then
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 they would be able to share that would the
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making
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, making
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 them aware
about
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of
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 the topic.
Apart from
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this
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,
good
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a good
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 teacher would know the best way to educate the children that would make them succeed academically.
On the other hand
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, other individuals think
students
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students'
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 way of thinking determines the success of the children, as in a
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survey,
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 it was seen that
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student
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students
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 from the same class had different results,
it
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which
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 determined that the willingness of the graduate played a crucial role in
his
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their
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 academic achievements.
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, if the child is not interested in learning,
then
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 no matter how hard a tutor
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tries,
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 they would not be able to make the child learn
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because of
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their
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attituded
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attitude
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 toward learning. To culminate the discussion,
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it
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 can be stated that the mindset of the
student
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 plays
an
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a
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 crucial role in
determing
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determining
educational excellence.
However
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, having a good teacher is like
cherry
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a cherry
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 on
the
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top as they would be able to
guild
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guide
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 the
student
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 in
better
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a better
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 way.

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task
Your essay shows both sides and your own view. To gain a higher score, add clearer and stronger reasons for each point and add more real examples.
coherence
Make the flow smooth. Use easy link words like 'also', 'but', 'however', and 'for example' to join ideas.
grammar
Check and fix grammar and spelling. Correct small errors like 'academical', 'attituded', missing words, and awkward phrases.
structure
Keep a steady structure: one intro, two body parts, and a short end or conclusion.
content
The essay shows a clear view and a plan to discuss both sides.
content
It uses two sides and a final view of the author.
content
There is an ending that gives the writer's opinion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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