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Writing Samples
Band 3

Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent
years
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years,
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 higher
authorizations
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authorities
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 have developed their economic plans to focus more on
individuals
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individual
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 satisfaction. In my opinion, I believe that governments should target more
puplic
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public
services
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 to improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
roads
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 and medical
services
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 for commuters.
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 with, spending more money on
roads
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provides
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has
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significant
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a significant
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effects
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effect
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 on
people
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people's
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 daily living. To
illustrte
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illustrate
, when
roads
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 are designed to follow the international
standered
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standard
 in terms of safety,
this
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ofen
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often
improve
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improves
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 the
easiness
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ease
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 of utilising those
roads
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 by shortening the time of waiting and delays.
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,
this
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approch
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approach
 usually improves both quality and safety of the majority of the
roads
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 in
conteries
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countries
.
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, when nations commence to develop their hospital
of
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in
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 the medical sector,
this
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consequently
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 can improve
helth awarness
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health awareness
 and eliminate diseases. In Japan,
for example
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, the government assign 60
percent
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per cent
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 of the
puplic
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public
 budget for enhancing hospitals and medical research,
thus
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,
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apply
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 increasing the level of medical knowledge and inventing new drugs to prevent the spread of numerous infectious diseases. In conclusion,
govenments
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governments
 should focus more on investing more money
on
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in
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puplic
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public
services
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due to
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 their benefits
like
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, like
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 improving
roads
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 and medical
services
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.
Therefore
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,
this
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 can lead to huge improvements in
quality
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the quality
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 of living in the community.

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development
Use more facts and wider view. Add at least one counter idea and a clear stance.
structure
Make ideas fit each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and better flow between points.
language
Check spell and grammar, keep simple words, and check how you order ideas so they fit the task.
task response
Clear view on the need to invest in public services.
coherence
Use of linking phrases to show order (To begin with, In addition, In conclusion).

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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