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The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.
The diagram illustrates a cyclical process in terms of recycling glasses, which combines mechanical and
manural
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manual
 operation.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the process includes six distinct stages, beginning with the collection of
bottles
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 and ending in
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 for sale.
To begin
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 with, the used
bottles
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 from
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 are collected in
recycle
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recycling
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 bins. They are
then
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 transported via truck to a treatment factory, where the glasses are handled by machines. In the factory, the used
bottles
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 need to be put in a washing and sterilising machine, where the
glasses
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bottles
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could turn
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can be turned
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 into clean conditions. After that, the cleaning
bottles
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 change their constructions via
crushing
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a crushing
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 machine, and are melted in a melting
divice
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device
, which transforms them into a liquid state.
Following
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this
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, the liquid
are
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is
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 poured into a moulding machine with
special
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a special
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 shape to create new
bottles
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.
Finally
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, the new
bottles
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 are
deliveried
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delivered
 through
truck
Correct article usage
a truck
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 to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 for reusing and start a new cyclical process.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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