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The best way to resolve the international environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact
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that environmental
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 problems are increasing rapidly.
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 some think that the most effective
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way to
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 resolve
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international
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 problems is to increase the cost of fuel, there is an opposing argument. In my opinion, I do not agree with the first notion.
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 with, to solve
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issues
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issues,
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 we need to follow certain steps, and spreading awareness is the first important step.
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, informing societies about environmental
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 is a concrete step towards resolving
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 phenomenon, as letting them know the real damage and the consequences of not taking
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immediate action
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 can make individuals cooperate more effectively with the case and
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willing to participate in many
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 friendly campaigns. Another point to consider is the critical role governments can play. It is possible to say that enforcing strict regulations on citizens can bring fruitful results.
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, the Korean government implement policies on its people,
such
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 as
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 of food waste and regular recycling, which contributed significantly to reducing environmental
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 in the region.
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, making public transportation convenient and cheaper than cars
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 can help greatly in solving environmental
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. It is undeniable the fact that the more we use cars
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, the
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 more polluted
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the air
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we gain
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;
therefore
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, making trains and buses affordable and comfortable to use is important
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 to reduce private
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that
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release
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releases
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 carbon emissions which result in polluted air. In conclusion, I do not believe that increasing the cost of fuel is the best and only way to solve the
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 problems. I am convinced that with well and specific planning, implementation of rules, and the collaboration of the public and authorities, we can tackle global environmental challenges.

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task response
Be clear on your main view in the first paragraph and keep it in mind as you write.
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Give two strong, simple examples for each point.
coherence
Use topic sentences to start each paragraph and link ideas with simple connects.
coherence
Use more linking words like also, but, so, yet to show flow.
language
Keep sentences short and clear. Check grammar and choose simple words.
stance
Clear view that you disagree with the idea.
example
Uses a real life example (Korea) to show policy effect.
structure
Good layout with intro, body and conclusion.
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