Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

In the era of advanced technology, so many
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developed
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that it is no longer difficult for the public to download copyrighted music and books without being charged. Some people argue that humans could reap the benefíts of
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proclivity, yet I do believe that its consequences may do more harm than good. Regarding their advantages, it is believed that free downloading of copyrighted content is beneficial.
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entertainment on the Internet. With the aid of free downloading, people having financial disadvantages
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likely to have more access to the world of knowledge,
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gain equal rights to develop academically and mentally, which used to be unfeasible.
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,
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helps people save money and time since they do not need to go to the bookstore and
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a large
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of
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for
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knowledge and entertainment.
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, I support the idea that free copyrighted content may lead to some Drastic results.
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is because these contents are the intellectual property of individuals, not society. They are made by authors and artists to earn a living.
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, distributing their products may pose an alarming threat to creative workers since they have to face
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receiving lower income and having no cash for more production.
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, they may feel disrespected since their works of art are stolen and used freely without permission.
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, they may be less likely to make contributions to society. Conclusively,
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free downloading contents may have
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certain merits, including having equal academic development and saving money and time, I am of the opinion that using intellectual contents with no charge is a negative trend that should be eliminated.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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