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Band 4

The most important aim of science is to improve people’s life. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In today’s world, it seems that everyone
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 it as read that the significant goal of science is to enhance people’s life quality. In my opinion, I
whole-heartedly
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 agree with the notion
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this
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 essay will outline the key reasons for my position. On the one hand, the rapid dissemination of scientific technology could bring unimagined advances in protecting
environment
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the environment
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.
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According
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 to
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increase
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increases
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 dramatically, there are many commuters driving their private vehicles to go to work
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 of public transportation like
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buses
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 or
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metros
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. That will
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lead to
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 the air condition inevitably.
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, a new popular automobile species emerges
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 our horizon that
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 is new energy vehicles. It is operated through electric fuels
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 are not
product
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exhaust
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 gases. That will be more likely to make the air clean.
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, the price of new energy vehicles is cheaper than
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traditional
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of traditional
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.
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vehicles.
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 It
perhaps can
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can perhaps
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 attract people to purchase the new one.
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,
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artificial intelligence is becoming a popular topic in
science
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the science
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 area. The primary approach to use it is through apps
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Deepseek
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 and
Chatgpt
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ChatGPT
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.
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 both
them
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of them
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 have different calculative model, they display their strong
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practical
 ability.
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, we can type our
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queries
 on the chat
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then
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 it will give you some useful suggestions in about 30 seconds.
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 the rapid response, it
it
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 likely to be a tutor in human lives
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tend
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tends
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 to enhance the work efficiency. We can receive practical suggestions more
convenient
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. In conclusion, despite science
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 a significant role in many areas like
environment and the
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the environment and
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artificial
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artificiality
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, the
poteintial
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potential
 goal is to enhance human lives
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, obviously
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.

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structure
Plan your essay. Use four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short end. Tell the reader your view in the intro.
coherence
Keep each idea simple and linked. Use 'and', 'but', 'so' to show how ideas relate.
language
Use one clear example per idea. Check your words so they fit the idea.
content
Your view is clear and you say you agree.
content
You give two ideas (car tech and AI) that show life can be better.
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