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Writing Samples
Band 1

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some individuals believe governments are obligated to provide clean
water
Use synonyms
 accessible
for
Change preposition
to
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public
Correct article usage
the public
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, without any charge. I strongly advocate
this
Linking Words
 aspect since
this
Linking Words
 development not only assures public health, but
also
Linking Words
prevent
Correct subject-verb agreement
prevents
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 imposing hidden costs to governments.
Accessibility
Replace the word
Access
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 to
free
Punctuation problem
free,
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purified
Punctuation problem
purified,
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 fresh
water
Use synonyms
 supports public health. If dwellers
be
Wrong verb form
are
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 obligated to pay for a glass of
water
Use synonyms
, it tends to be an unaffordable matter for
velnurable
Correct your spelling
vulnerable
 and low-income groups. Under
Linking Words
this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
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Correct your spelling
circumstances
cercumstances
Add a comma
cercumstances,
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 they have to use free
water
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 sources which may be unpurified or infected.
This
Linking Words
 status leads to
rising
Wrong verb form
the rise of
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 some diseases,
such
Linking Words
 as
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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diarriah
Correct your spelling
diarrhoea
 or
heppatit
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hepatitis
 A, which are contagious and
undoubtly
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undoubtedly
 will be a
threatening
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threat
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for
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to
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 public health
level
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apply
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. As another
consiquence
Correct your spelling
consequence
,

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structure
Finish the intro with a clear idea of what you will say
structure
Add a short conclusion that restates your view
language
Check spell and keep to simple, correct words
language
Use short and clear sentences; avoid long, hard builds
coherence
Add joining words to link ideas (and, also, because, so)
content
Give one or two clear examples that fit the topic
content
Your view is clear.
content
You give reasons about health and money.
structure
There is some plan of ideas in your writing (intro and body).

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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