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The pictures show the process of making cherry jam. Describe the process.

The illustrations given depict the process of making cherry jam at each stage. The procedure involves nine main stages, beginning with collecting berries and ending with
jars
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labelling jars
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labeling
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apply
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.
Initially
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, people shook a tree and collected cherries.
Then
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, fruits are transported by a track to a conveyor belt in order to separate them from spoiled berries. Having been separated, they undergo a purification process. After being
washed
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washed,
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 each fruit goes through a metal spine, which extrudes the cherry stone. Once all the berries are prepared, the heating process of creating a jam begins. Sugar
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along
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 with pectin and lemon juice added to the substance and heated to make it consistent.
The next step is
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 an integral part of product making - the quality check. A man testing the texture, combination of flavours and smell to make sure it is ready to be packed. Ultimately, the final product is filled into jars, covered with a lid and stickered with a label.

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task response
Task response: You give most steps in order and you talk about the main parts of how jam is made. To raise the score, add a short opening line that tells what you will describe and a short closing line that restates the main idea.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: The steps go in a clear order, and you use time words like first, then, next, finally. Some long sentences can be split to make it easy to read. Use more linking words to tie ideas.
sequence
Clear order of steps from picking fruit to final jar.
structure
Use of time words shows steps in time.
content
Describes most parts of the process with needed detail.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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