Many businesses are relocating to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, many people have debated whether the benefits of settling in
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outweigh its disadvantages.
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relocating
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villages
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some advantages
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as creating job
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opportunities
and reducing
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in the big cities, I believe its drawbacks are more serious, including the risk of pollution and creating
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place for animals. One merit of locating in non-urban areas is that companies may offer work for individuals who live in
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rural
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and need a permanent job. In the
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, job
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opportunities
are limited.
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, most work
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religions. Another advantage is that locating companies in rural areas decreases
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in bigger cities. Society
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to live in bigger cities
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that
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noise in
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places.

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structure
Make your stance clear in one line in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion.
structure
Write 4–5 well‑formed paragraphs: an intro, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
content
Develop each main idea with a simple example or fact, and explain how it helps or harms.
language
Use simple, everyday words and check spellings to stay in the top 100 words.
idea
Clear opinion against the move is stated.
content
Some relevant points are mentioned (job opportunities, crowding).

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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