IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people say that shops should sell food products from the local area rather than sell food imported from other country's.Do you agree or disagree?

It is always argued that small shopkeepers should promote food items prepared by local
brands
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, rather than
they
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apply
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getting products from
a
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wholesalers or big
brands
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 the writer
is agree
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agrees
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 with the statement and
going
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is going
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 to discuss both sides. On the one hand, if we shed some light
to promote
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on promoting
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 the food items prepared
locally
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locally,
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 are
going to
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will
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 be fresh and healthy.
For example
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, it is going to be convenient to place their order for big functions in less amount of time
and
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, and
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 if they want
to
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to,
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 they can stand there to take care of their stuff
going
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, going
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 to be prepared.
Moreover
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, if they do so,
its
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it's
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 going to be
boom
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a boom
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 in
country's
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the country's
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 GDP rate as they
keeps
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keep
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 their money in their own nation.
On the other hand
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, sometimes the local brand
unable
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is unable
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 to provide
variety
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a variety
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 of products and some patented food
brands
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 have their own patented products, which could be hard to produce
into
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in
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 local markets. To illustrate,
Mcdonalds
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McDonald's
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, KFC and Domino's have their own secret
recipees
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recipes
 and their special sauces and seasonings, which will be hard to afford and arrange for local shopkeepers,
eventhough
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even though
 if they
willing
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are willing
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 to prepare their own
product
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product,
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the
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they
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 might be unable to
matchthe
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match the
 health and safety standards
has been
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apply
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followed by international
brands
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.
To conclude
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,
i
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I
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 would say
i
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I
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 discussed both sides of the
aessay
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essay
,
although
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I isaid
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isaid
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said
 that local businessmen should promote their local businesses more to spread their economies.
Hence
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,international
brands
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has
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have
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 their own place in the market, because of their specifications
as well as
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 rules and
regulaation
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regulations
policies
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apply
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.

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grammar
Fix the spelling and small grammar mistakes so the text is easy to read.
structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and restate it in the end.
content
Give at least one real example for each point you make.
writing
Use short, simple sentences. Break long sentences into two or three.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas smoothly (for example, also, but, however).
structure
The essay has a clear layout: intro, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
content
There is an effort to discuss both sides of the issue.
topic
The topic is clear and on task.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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