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The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.

The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
The line chart shows the
number
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 of
population
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people
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 in the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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 commuting daily by using three different
tyeps
Correct your spelling
types
 of vehicles from 70s to 2030.
Linking Words
overall
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Overall
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, the
number
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 of
using
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people using
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cars
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trains
Correct word choice
and trains
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 increased over the entire time period. Trains have decreased and stayed stable. The
cars
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 have
rose
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risen
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 from 1970 until 2000,
then
Linking Words
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 stable from 2000 to 2010. From
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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cars
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 will
climbed
Wrong verb form
climb
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dramaticly
Correct your spelling
dramatically
 until the peak in 2030.
Trains
Fix the agreement mistake
Train
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 numbers increased from 1970 to
2000
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2000,
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 as same as
the
Correct article usage
apply
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cars
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,
then
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will stay
Wrong verb form
stayed
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 stable until
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 to grew
up
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apply
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sharply in 2030. The
number
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 of buses will remain stable until 2010,
then
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 it will drop a little bit. From 2020 to
2030
Punctuation problem
2030,
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 the
number
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 of buses will be stable.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 5 times.
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