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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming athing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In today’s world, people propose that
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internet
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the internet
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 becomes more popular.
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, they believe that
newspapers
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 are becoming out of date. In my view, I
whole-heartedly
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 agree
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this
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with this
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 notion since
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internet
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the internet
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 is a more modern and convenient
pattern
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way
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for browsing
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to browse
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. On the one hand,
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internet
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the internet
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 could catch the heated news, which we focus on,
they
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and they
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are
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apply
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then
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 rapidly
emerged
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emerge
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 on the social media platforms.
In contrast
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, some passages of
newspapers
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 might not be suitable for everyone.
For example
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, people, especially
commuters
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commuters,
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 have not much leisure time to buy
newspapers
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 before going
work
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to work
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, let alone
wheather
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whether
 they are suitable for them.
Instead
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 of
newspapers
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, they prefer browsing
imformation
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information
 on the
internet
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 via online news media like BBC when they are on the metro or the bus.
Therefore
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, they could accept social hot
point
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points
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 efficiently.
On the other hand
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, the used
newspapers
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 might have
negative
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a negative
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 impression
to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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 and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
. In detail, some people would throw the used
newspapers
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to
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apply
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anywhere
like
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, like
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street
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the street
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 or
river
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the river
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,
which
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where
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 nobody can handle them in time.
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,
that
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it
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 has been linked to
pollute
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polluting
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 the public areas.
Besides
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,
government
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the government
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 manages to recycle and handle the used
newspapers
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 need a huge economic support, which aims to employ staff and maintain machines in health
conditions
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condition
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.
Consequently
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, that perhaps
result
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results
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 in more economic stress in
goverments
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governments
 so that some potential economic danger would
be appeared
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appear
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. Those are why traditional paper
tend
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tends
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 to be replaced. In conclusion, discussing
with
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apply
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two aspects in terms of
imformation
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information
 catching and social influence. I
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am strong
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strong
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strongly
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 convinced that
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internet
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the internet
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would
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will
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 be the mainstream pattern, and
newspapers
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 might be gradually reduced in the future.

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grammar
Fix long sentences. Use shorter, clear sentences.
coherence
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and keep one idea in it.
task response
Give more clear examples and explain how they support your view.
lexical
Check words: 'information' not 'imformation', 'weather' not 'wheather', 'environment' etc.
style
Use a consistent formal tone and fix spelling errors.
purpose
The writer gives a clear view that the internet will be main source.
structure
There is an attempt to compare internet news with paper newspapers.
content
Examples about commuters and online sources show effort to support ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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