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Nowadays people waste a significant amount of food that has been purchased from stores and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

Few topics in contemporary discourse have attracted as much attention as the careless
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 waste that has been bought from markets and
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 stalls.
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 essay is going to explore the reasons why today's society wastes
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 and propose several viable measures to mitigate its adverse effects.
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 issue can largely be attributed to how abundant
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 is in the current world. Back
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, when nutrients and resources were scarce,
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 ate each meal with great gratitude. But seeing how plentiful
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 is nowadays, its
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 has lost.
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, in the 1975 famine after the American war,
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people
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 survived strictly on plain rice, nuts, even pig
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, and they considered a full meal to be a gift from god. Adversely, though the Vietnamese cuisine is now rich and diverse, the
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 don't
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 what they eat and keep on wasting
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 Another major factor is how
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 is distributed around a country. An undeniable fact is that
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 is plentiful in the suburbs
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 and scarce in the countryside. An example of proof is how lavish the
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 in capitals or big cities eat compared to all the low-cost fish and rice that farmers consume every day. Addressing
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 challenge requires a multifaceted approach.
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 with, equipping citizens with good education should be prioritised, as it directly tackles the problem of acknowledging
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's
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. These moral lessons must be obligatory in the school curriculum and work training.
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, better
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contributed
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 by the government ought to be implemented to ensure sustainability.
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 requires ruling bodies to divide
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 not essentially equal, but appropriately based on each area's situation.
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,
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 waste primarily results from a lack of knowledge and wrong distribution.
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, by enacting measures
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 as teaching
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 the
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 of
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 and better distributing systems, society can significantly alleviate its negative impacts.

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coherence
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task
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lexical
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task
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structure
The essay shows a clear plan with an opening and closing part.
coherence
There are links that show how ideas connect.
content
The topic is real and you show steps to solve the issue.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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