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The table below presents the food consumption per person weekly in a European country in 1992, 2002 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the food consumption per person weekly in a European country in 1992, 2002 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the average amount of food, divided into 5 types, eaten every week in a European country from 1992 to 2012. On the whole, it is apparent that the consumption of
vegetable
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vegetables
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, wheat,
bean
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beans
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 and
cheese
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 experienced a constant rise,
while
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 that for meat saw a reverse trend after
small
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a small
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 fluctuation.
According to
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 the chart, in the first year given, there were over 2
kilogram
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kilograms
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 of vegetables consumed weekly.
Also
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,
this
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 data was two times higher than that for meat and ranked the highest.
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, the former for wheat, bean and
cheese
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 was above 800 and over 500
grams
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respectively
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. Meanwhile, roughly 100
grams
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 of
cheese
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 were taken each week, which was the lowest. In the next two decades, the category of
vegetable
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vegetables
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 climbed continuously to higher than 2220 and still took the lead. In the meantime, the quantity of wheat went up moderately, reaching nearly 1 kilogram in 2012, doubling that
for
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of
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bean
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beans
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.
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, the figure for
cheese
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 witnessed a slight increase to 125
grams
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 in 2002, yet remained unchanged in the
last
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 10 years and stood at the bottom point. Contrastingly, despite a minimal growth to around 1200
grams
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, the category of meat declined significantly to about 1100
grams
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, which was less than its
initual
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initial
 amount.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food consumption
  • per person
  • weekly
  • significant increase
  • decrease
  • staple foods
  • proteins
  • consumption patterns
  • dietary shifts
  • fruits and vegetables
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • analyze
  • compare
  • report
  • data points
  • European country
  • fluctuations
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