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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.
The part charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the most likeable
takaways
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takeaways
 of
Canadian
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Canadians
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 and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between the 60s and 2015.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of people in Canada who prefer
the
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apply
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takeaways
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takeaway
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food
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were
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was
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 in Chinese
food
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,
while
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 the lowest percentages in different types of foods were in Greek, Japanese, and Mexican.
According to
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 the pie chart, people prefer
takeways
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takeaways
 in
Canda
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Canada
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 with two types of
food
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. The highest type was
Chainese
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Chinese
food
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 with 34
percent
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per cent
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,
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however
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however,
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 the Indian
food
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 came in the second favourite
food
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 with 26%. The lowest
number of percentages
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percentage
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were
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was
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 in six different types of
food
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, which were
Greak
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Greek
 with 11%, Italian with 10%, Persian with 9%, Tahi with 3% ,Japanese and Mexican with 1%. The rest of the percentages were to people who
does
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do
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 not prefer to order
takeways
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takeaways
 or prefer other kinds of
food
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • favourite takeaways
  • people in Canada
  • number of Indian restaurants
  • 1960
  • 2015
  • types of takeaways
  • popular
  • 55 years
  • country
  • time frame
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