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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

THERE IS NO DENYING THE FACT THAT RESIDENTS ARE THE SIGNIFICANT PRIORITY FOR THE COUNTRIES, AND FEEDING THEM IS THE SECOND MAJOR
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 PLENTY OF INDIVIDUALS CONSIDER THAT COUNTRIES SHOULD BE ABLE TO PROVIDE THE FOODSTUFF FOR THEIR NATION THEMSELVES.
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, IMPORT A SMALL AMOUNT OF IT TO OTHER NATIONS. IN MY VIEW, I CONCUR WITH
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 CONSIDERATION BECAUSE IT HAS MANY PROS AND CONS AT THE SAME TIME.
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 WITH, THE BENEFITS OF PREDUCING VEGETABLES AND FRUITS FOR YOUR OWN NATION IS SIGNIFICANTLY BENEFICIAL BECAUSE YOU CAN ONLY RELY ON YOUR OWN RESOURCES, WHICH WILL COST LESS THAN WHEN YOU BRING IT FROM ANOTHER
COUNTRY
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. IT IS POSSIBLE TO SAY THAT THERE IS NO DOUBT THAT SOME SPECIES OF
FOOD
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 NEED TO BE EXPORTED BECAUSE OF THE CLIMATE AND THE GENERAL ENVIRONMENT OF THE
COUNTRY
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. SO
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 WILL BENEFICIALLY RETURN ON THE ECONOMY OF THE
COUNTRY
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 ITSELF.
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, IN SAUDI ARABIA, WE IMPORT A HUGE AMOUNT OF DATE BECAUSE THE WEATHER IN THE
COUNTRY
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 ENABLE US TO PRODUCE IT. WITH REGARD TO THE DRAWBACKS OF THE CONCEPT, AS I MENTIONED THAT THE GENERAL ENVIRONMENT OF THE
COUNTRY
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 CAN BE DOMINATED BY HOW MANY KINDS OF
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 WE PRODUCE.
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,
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 WILL LIMIT THE PROCESS OF PRODUCING THE
FOOD
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 AND MIGHT NEED TO EXPORT MORE
FOOD
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 FROM OTHER COUNTRIES.
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, NATURALLY, IT WILL BE COSTLY.
FOR INSTANCE
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, IN SAUDI ARABIA, WE EXPORT MANY KINDS OF FRUITS
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, STRAWBERRIES FROM TURKEY AND SPAIN. TO NUTSHELL, PRODUCING THE
FOOD
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 FOR YOUR NATION HAS PLENTY OF ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES.
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 AS, LESS COST AND BENEFIT TO THE
COUNTRY
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 ITSELF REGARDING EXPORTING IT.
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, THE CONS ARE A LACK OF PRODUCING SOME SPECIES
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 THE WEATHER AND MIGHT COST A LOT.

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structure
Make your view clear at the start and end of the essay.
coherence
Use simple words that link ideas, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however','therefore'.
planning
Give a clear plan in the middle: one paragraph for pros, one for cons, one for your view.
evidence
Add more exact facts or facts suited to the idea to back up each point.
stance
You show a view and mix good points from both sides.
content
You give some real place names as examples.
evidence
There is some effort to discuss cost and produce.
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