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The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 the reasons for the suspension of flight departures in a specific Asian region in
years
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the years
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 2015 and 2016.
Overall
Linking Words
, more
flights
Use synonyms
 were delayed
due to
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 airline operations management, airport security and adverse weather,
while
Linking Words
less
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fewer
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 were suspended for air traffic control and military reasons. In 2015, two-fifths of
flights
Use synonyms
 failed to depart on time because of
operation
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operational
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 management among different airlines,
then
Linking Words
 the number increased to 46% in 2016, being the most common factor of flight delays in the 2 consecutive years. Around one-fifth of the
flights
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 were delayed
due to
Linking Words
 bad weather in 2015. The proportion slightly rose by 2% in the subsequent year.
On
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In
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 the initial year, merely 4% of
flights
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 were suspended
by
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due to
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 airport
trip
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trips
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, but that skyrocketed to 13% in the next year. In 2015, 25% of
flights
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 departed late because of air traffic control, and the percentage sharply dropped by 13% afterwards. Regarding
flights
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 which were affected by military factors, the percentages decreased from 10% to 6% between 2015 and 2016.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words flights with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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