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Band 4

Billions of dollars are spent on Space research every year. Instead, this money could be used to improve living conditions of people on Earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that millions of
income
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is
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 spent on
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space research every year. But some people believe that
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 money can be
utilized
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 to improve the living standard of the individuals. I partially agree with
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 statement.
Although
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 doing space research is of utmost
importance
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 as
not
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 only
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this
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provides us with the various new technologies and formulas that
makes
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task
Clarify your view in the opening line and give 2 or 3 reasons with simple examples.
coherence
Improve the flow with simple linking words and connect ideas in a clear order.
content
The writer shows a clear view by saying they partially agree.
structure
There is an attempt to discuss both sides of the issue.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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