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Band 3

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicnes and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

These days,
amount
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a number
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 of
people
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 are looking for a new way to solve their
health
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 problems
then
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 keep the same doctors and medicine. I think it is positive, because some medicines can't help us
to
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apply
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get
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health
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healthy
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. I believe that natural alternatives can be more
afficient
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efficient
 and less
agressive
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aggressive
 for us. Indeed, there are some
sickness
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sicknesses
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 that
the
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apply
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people
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 are using some
drugs
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 from the
quimical
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chemical
 companies
but
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, but
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 it
is
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does
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 not help them at all. Because
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this
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of this
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they
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, they
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 are seeking a new type of treatment that
keep
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keeps
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 going in the same way.
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, there are
a
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apply
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many
people
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 going to rituals to try
stop
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to stop
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 the mental
health
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 problems, it is helping these
people
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, because they won't take medicines and they
believes
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believe
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 in
this
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 method. The medicines could be really bad for us, there are many
drugs
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 that can get us addicted, in
long
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the long
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 time could be hard to let
it
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apply
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go. Imagine we are taking
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this
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these
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drugs
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 to help us get focus, but it is increasing our anxiety
,
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;
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however
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 it will not be the best way,
because
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apply
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this
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apply
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I think the treatment without
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drugs
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drug
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 medicine can be the best choice for us. In conclusion, I believe
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it always
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always is
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is always
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 a good
ideia
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idea
find
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to find
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 some natural alternatives because
it
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they
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 come from nature, there
are
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is
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 not plenty of
quimicals
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chemical
 stuff,
also
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 to do a treatment without medicine as a
rituals
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ritual
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, meetings. We are free
do to
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to do
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 what we want to do, why not try new experiences to improve our
health
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.

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task response
Plan your essay. Say your view at the start. Then give two or three reasons.
coherence
Make clear paragraphs. One idea per paragraph.
language
Use simple words and correct spellings. Learn some common wrong words and spell them right.
coherence
Use linking words like but, and, also, because, so to show how ideas are linked.
content
The writer shows a view on the topic.
content
Some reason and example are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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