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The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.
The pie chart illustrates the results of a survey on how financially organised students were in the United Kingdom,
while
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 the table presents the figures for three age groups who were categorised as very organised.
Overall
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, the majority of them were classified as fairly organised,
whereas
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 those aged over 26 recorded the highest share of very organised individuals. In terms of managing finances, more than half of the respondents reported being fairly organised.
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 was followed by 21% who were very organised, slightly higher than 20% who considered themselves not very organised.
In contrast
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, only 4% of the participants did not manage their finances at all. As for the category of very organised, 18% of those aged under 22 were included, representing the lowest percentage among all age groups. A
further
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 26% was observed for 23-25-year-olds, compared with 35% for the over-26 age group.
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, the average proportion of all students stood at 21%.

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