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The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2002, and the projected building in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of one college campus from 1975 to 2002, and the projected building in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps compare the changes of one college campus between 1975 and 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the extent of academic areas
experienced
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 considerable expansion.
Additionally
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, the roads of the campus were redesigned for development. In 1975, there was a sports field located
at
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 the northern part,
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 the opposite was occupied by a car park, theatre, and music
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 was situated
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 the northeastern part of the campus.
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, the building that was
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 in the southeast was lecture rooms, and the southwestern corner was a library. By 2010, the lecture rooms and the carpark were enlarged significantly and shared the same building.
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, the
theater
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 was converted into the geology centre, accompanied by the music theatre and the new science infrastructure,
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 the development of educational facilities influenced the changes
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original
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the original
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 display of roads.
At
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 the west side of the diagram, the library became smaller than
1975
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in 1975
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, which shared the space with the IT centre, and the top of
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the map
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 saw the sports field
which
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, which
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 had been refurbished and was expected to finish with its bypass in 2020.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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