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The charts below show the changes in onwershipl of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one coutnry between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in onwershipl of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one coutnry between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart represents the percentage of
households
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 which owned electrical appliances and the amount of
time
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doing
Verb problem
spent doing
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 household chores in a
week
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 per household over a 99-year period.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that the ownership of all three items, especially refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, witnessed a significant increase
while
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 the average
hours
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 of housework per
week
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 fell dramatically over the given period. In 1920, none of the
households
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 owned refrigerators;
nonetheless
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, over the following decades, refrigerator ownership rose sharply , reaching 90% by 1960, and 100% from 1980 onwards.
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, in 1920, only 30% of
households
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 owned vacuum cleaners, but the figures climbed consistently to reach full coverage in 2000. Washing machines were owned by 40% of
households
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 in the 1920s, which was the highest at that
time
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. It grew steadily but gradually
reaching
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reached
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 approximately three-fourths of
households
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 in
2019
Punctuation problem
2019,
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 despite a slight dip in 1980.
Conversely
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, the amount of
time
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 spent on doing housework per
week
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 declined steadily throughout the period shown. In
1920s
Correct article usage
the 1920s
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, people spent 50
hours
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 a
week
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in
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apply
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doing household chores, but
this
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 figure fell dramatically to 20
hours
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 by 1960, cutting the amount of
time
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 spent in 1920.
Then
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 the numbers continued to drop slightly to only 10
hours
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 by 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, time, week, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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