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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that
maintain
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 the environment is a crucial
, and
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process, and
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 it is a
sharing
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 process among the community members.
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 it is a commonly held belief that plastic shopping bags
is
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are
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 one of the main harmful items, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that plastic materials have a negative
impacts
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impact
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 on our health, and they should be
banded
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banned
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.
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 with,
this
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 trend is globally spread and
majority
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 of people still
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 on traditional bags which made
by
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harm
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 ingredients.
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, many individuals do not have any ideas about plastic risks,
for example
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, cancer and lung defects.
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, the unrenewable products have a direct connection with
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 the aquatic life.
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, it can
led
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 to environmental imbalance
due to
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 the
decreasing
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decrease
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of
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in
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 oxygen generation. A poor African
countries
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country
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 is
the
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a
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this
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these
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 issues
,
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 the unconsciousness of inhabitants can
brings
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 greater natural drawbacks. Another point to consider, these products should
banned
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be banned
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 around the world.
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, renewable items like paper bags must replace them.
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, the population should receive
overall
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 awareness about the pros and cons of these complications through allocating initiatives, and the government should play a vital role
to tackle
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in tackling
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 these problems and contributing to
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 the concept of
environment
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environmental
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 protection.
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, allocate special pins with different
colors
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colours
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 for waste products just as the same ones are
using
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used
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 in advanced countries. In conclusion, despite people having different views. I believe that many
persons
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people are
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 accustomed to exaggerating of plastics uses
,
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apply
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 for
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this
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, the nations should apply fines against violators.

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structure
Plan your write. Use a clear plan for intro, 1 idea per paragraph, and a short end.
content
Give clear and full choice. Explain why and add one clear example.
language
Check grammar. Use short, simple sentences with correct verb form.
cohesion
Use topic line in each paragraph. Use simple link words like first, also, but, so.
task response
The piece shows a clear view that plastic ships to ban.
coherence
There is a plan and some linking words to help flow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Decompose
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Eco-friendly
  • Sustainability
  • Environmental footprint
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Mandate
  • Incentives
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