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The bar chart below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts a survey's outcome about
London
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 citizens' impressions
on
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of
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 the city
during
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 three years. On the whole, it is apparent that the percentage of inhabitants linking
London
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 with shopping, job opportunities, a mixture of
people
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 and
night life
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nightlife
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 went down considerably,
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 that for museums/art galleries and transport saw a significant rise.
According to
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 the chart, in the first year, about 45% of
London
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 dwellers thought that
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 region had a wide range of shops.
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,
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 data
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 took the lead and
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 that for museums/art galleries,
night
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nightlife
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 life and transport, which were at the bottom rankings.
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, the former for both job opportunities and a mixture of
people
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 were under 40%. In the next two years, despite a small decline, the figure for shopping was still on top, at under 45%. Sharing the same trend, the lowest position belonged to
night life
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nightlife
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 with above 20%. Meanwhile, the category for job opportunities and a mixture of
people
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 shared the same downward
tendecy
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trend
 and proportion in the
last
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 year mentioned, at around 35%. Contrastingly, there were more
people
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 believing that
London
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 was a city of museums/art galleries and transport in that year, which were both approximately 25%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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