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learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the adv intaantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, it has become common to learn
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 of waiting
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school
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. Though
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 there are some drawbacks associated with learning a
language
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but
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it benefits are far
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greater
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 will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. One of the main advantages of learning
non-native
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a non-native
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language
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 is that they can learn
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the language
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 in a better
way
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. Because, in the early
period
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life
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, their brain
adapt
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adapts
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new
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a
quick
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 rather than
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period
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periods
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 of
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 children who start learning English or French in the first class
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they
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will be able to speak more fluently as compared to those who start to learn in
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 class.
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, above mentioned factor shows the benefit of
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period
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 of
life
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. Another main benefit is
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cultural awareness. By learning
new
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 in the
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stages
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, they can acquire knowledge about other
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countries'
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 customs and traditions. In
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, they will not only
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 to settle themselves easily
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abroad, but
also
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be able
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 to communicate with
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people from other communities.
Hence
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,
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also
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 the one main factor of learning
second
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However
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, there are some disadvantages that are associated with learning a second
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.
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, it creates extra pressure on children as they already have
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 of academic subjects to learn,
then
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 burden on their mental health.
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,
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 subject will have a worse impact on their exam results because
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they will have to devote their precious time to learn another
language
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. In
this
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way
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, they will hardly get enough time to prepare for their exams. In conclusion,
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learning
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language
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 not only
help
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 children
to
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broaden their
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, but
also
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make
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 them
able
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to speak additional
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languages
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.

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structure
Make the main idea clear in the first line so the reader knows your view.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. This helps talk to the reader.
content
Have one idea for each paragraph and add a tiny example to back it.
editing
Check common mistakes like untill and bad word use to fix small errors.
strength
The essay shows a view on both sides of the topic.
strength
It gives a clear point that language can come at a good time for kids.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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