The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
The bar graph illustrates the total
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percentage of children who are learning to play different kinds of musical instruments (piano,
drums
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, guitar, and
violin
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) in a particular school between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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the
violin
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kind experienced a decline
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three instruments escalated. Notably, the piano and the guitar instruments the most common among students. The
drums
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and the
violin
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followed opposite patterns. In 2005 and 2010, the percentage remained relatively stable for both kinds. Nearly 10% accounted for
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violin
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the violin
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and around 5% for
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drums
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the drums
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, respectively.
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the
drums
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increased to roughly 10% in 2015, the
drums
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to approximately 5% by 2015, which was the lowest point in that year.
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, both the piano and the guitar increased significantly over the period shown. The proportion started at slightly over 10% in 2005 and went up to around 40% in 2015. Overtaking
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two kinds.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words drums, violin with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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