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the graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 graph compares how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was emitted into the atmosphere in four countries over a period of 40
years
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was a downward trend in CO2
emissions
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 in the United
Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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,
while
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 there was an upward trend for Italy and Portugal. In the first ten
years
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, the amount of CO2, which was emitted to the air in Portugal, Italy, and
Sweden
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, increased,
whereas
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this
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 figure experienced a steady decrease in the United
Kingdom
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. In the next ten
years
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, Italy and Portugal indicated a significant growth in CO2
emissions
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.
However
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, the amount of CO2
emissions
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 in
Sweden
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 and the United
Kingdom
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 decreased to 7 and 10, respectively. From 1987 to 1997, a dramatic increase in CO2
emissions
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 was reported in Italy and Portugal.
In contrast
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, the average CO2
emissions
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 plummeted in
Sweden
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 and the United
Kingdom
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.
Similarly
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,
this
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 trend continued in the
last
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 10
years
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.
Therefore
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, the amount of CO2
emissions
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 in
Sweden
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 and Portugal reached the same level. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the United
Kingdom
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 was the largest producer of CO2 among all four countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, years, emissions, kingdom, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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