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What are the advantages and disadvantages of working remotely? What is the future of remote work? Include any relevant example from your own experience.

In
this
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 contemporary scenario, owing to
advance
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 technology, workers are often allowed to
work
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 from
home
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.
Therefore
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, I personally believe that
employees
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 may lose an opportunity to be more productive and creative.
However
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, it is more convenient and
flexiable
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flexible
 than working in
office
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an office
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.
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employees
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Employees
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 may lose an opportunity to be more productive and creative. At the same time, telecommuting is likely to experience greater growth and
advancememnt
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advancement
 in the upcoming years.
despite
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 having
few
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a few
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 potential benefits, it
also
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have
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has
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 some negative aspects. The significant drawback is distraction
which
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, which
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 may reduce productivity,
concentrate
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, and
enhance
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increase
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 more chances of making mistakes. To explain it.
workplace
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The workplace
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 provides a positive and
desciplined
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disciplined
 environment, even all members are obliged to adhere
the
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to the
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 company's policies.
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while
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,
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apply
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employees
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 are more likely to fail to focus on their tasks just because of background noise at
home
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.
As a result
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, one may easily lose
the
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apply
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interest and task
achivement
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achievement
 before the deadline. Numerous advantages
has
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have
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 been accounted for virtual
work
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but
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, but
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 the prominent one is that it is quite beneficial not only for
employees
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 but
also
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 for employers in
trems
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terms
 of low accommodation expense and high company productivity.
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, undoubtedly, workers may save
eating
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on eating
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, travelling, and
accomodation
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accommodation
expense
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expenses
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 if they
are working
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work
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 off-site
than
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rather than
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 working far from their
home
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.
Additionally
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,
due to
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 the
flexiable
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flexible
work
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 schedule, employee are more likely to
work
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 in their productive hours, which makes them more
crteative
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creative
 and
enthusiasm
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enthusiastic
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.
However
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,
association
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associations
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 do not require
to pay
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paying
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 for utilities
,
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apply
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 and office management.
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consequently
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Consequently
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, it phenomenon
support
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supports
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 financially
to
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apply
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both employers and
employees
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.
Advance
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Advanced
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 technology
enable
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enables
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work
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 arrangements
remotely
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to be done remotely
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.
Similarly
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, it has a wide and developed future, as it assists the masses to
work
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 for any organisation regardless of time and distance.
Hence
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,
employees
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 can
work
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 for any international firm through
computer
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a computer
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 just by sitting at their
home
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, which is comparatively cheaper than the traditional way of working in
office
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an office
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,
it
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and it
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 would be more embraced by companies. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it, Microsoft hire talented staff members from all over the world and
authorise
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authorises
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working
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them to work
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 remotely. In conclusion,
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work
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working
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 from
home
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 may
ocassionally
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occasionally
 hinder
the
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apply
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goal achievement
due to
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 potential distractions or
lack
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a lack
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 of direct supervision.
However
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, it offers significant
cost- saving
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cost-saving
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 benefits for both
firm
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the firm
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 and
workers
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the workers
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.
As
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With
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growing
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the growing
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 demand
of
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for
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home
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-based
employement
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employment
, it would be quite popular in the future.

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planning
Plan your writing. Start with a short view on the topic, then give one main idea per paragraph.
structure
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however'.
content
Explain both sides and give a real example. Do not repeat the same line.
grammar
Keep to simple grammar. Check verb form and plural, and use common words only.
grammar
Limit spelling errors and keep sentences not too long.
conclusion
Close with a short end that restates your view.
content
The essay tries to show both good and bad sides of remote work.
content
It adds a future view and a real example (Microsoft).
structure
There is an ending that sums up the idea.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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