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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average monthly percentage
change
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 in the prices of
three
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 metals-
copper
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,
nickel
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, and zinc-over the course of 2014.
Overall
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, the
three
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 metals showed significant volatility throughout the
year
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, with
Copper
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 experiencing the most dramatic fluctuations.
While
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 all
three
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 began the
year
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at
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with
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 varying positive changes,
Nickel
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 and
Copper
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 ended at a similar level of modest increase,
whereas
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 Zine showed the biggest
overall
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 rise among the
three
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.
Copper
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 and
Nickel
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 largely followed a similar trend in the first half of the
year
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, both witnessing a sharp drop.
Copper
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's
price
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change
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 plummeted from its starting high of 6% in January to its lowest point of a -3% decrease in June, a nine-point fall.
Nickel
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also
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 saw a considerable decline, dropping from 2% to its low of -2% in the same six-month period. Following a brief recovery in July,
Copper
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's
price
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change
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 again fell dramatically to about -2% in September before recovering to just over 1% by December.
In contrast
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, Zinc exhibited more moderate changes. After peaking at a 3% increase in February, its
price
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change
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 gradually trended downwards, reaching a low of 0% in June. From July to September, Zinc's
change
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 stabilised, holding steady at a small decline of around -0.5%.
However
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, the final quarter of the
year
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 saw a strong recovery for Zinc, with its
price
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change
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 increasing steadily to finish at its second-highest point of the
year
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, approximately 2.5%, compared to
Nickel
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's 1% and
Copper
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's 1.5% in December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, three, nickel, year, copper, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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