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The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of
eletricity
Correct your spelling
electricity
 production by using one kind of coal.
Overall
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, the process of producing
electricity
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 takes around 9 steps starting from collecting the coal from the mine until it
reached
Wrong verb form
reaches
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your home or other building around the city,
although
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this
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require
Correct subject-verb agreement
requires
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 using different materials and
differet
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different
method
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methods
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 to produce the
electricity
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.
To begin
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 with, main, in
this
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 phase of the
process
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process,
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 they take the coal from the mine
, in
Punctuation problem
. In
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this
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step
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step,
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 the coal
are
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is
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consider
Wrong verb form
considered
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 to be large
so
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, so
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 they need to crush it in the next step.
Then
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, they use a truck to move the coal to
Gasifier
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the Gasifier
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,
over
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apply
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there
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where
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 they heat it to
turned
Wrong verb form
turn it
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 into
gas
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, before they
cooling
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cool
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 it in
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 step. After that, they would have to result of cooling the coal or the
gas
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, one goes to waste
heat
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heat,
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 the other goes to be clean
,
Punctuation problem
. Furthermore
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furthermore
Punctuation problem
furthermore,
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 they take the coal or the
gas
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 to
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Gas
Correct article usage
a Gas
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 power
plant
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plant,
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where
Correct word choice
which
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 is
in
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apply
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that
Correct determiner usage
apply
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considered to
last
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 main point before they
transformed
Verb problem
are transformed
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 into
a
Correct article usage
apply
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electricity
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, before
Punctuation problem
. Before
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 that, they get rid of waste heat.
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Finally
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Finally,
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 they deliver the
electricity
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 into your home and
in
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apply
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other
building
Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
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 around the city.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coal mining
  • Open-pit mining
  • Transportation logistics
  • Power plant
  • Pulverized coal
  • Combustion
  • Boiler
  • Steam generation
  • Turbines
  • Kinetic energy
  • Electrical energy
  • Generator
  • Cooling and condensing
  • Recycling
  • Electricity transmission
  • National grid
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