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Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter ● state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this ● give details of how you have benefited from the club ● explain why you want to leave

Dear
Mr.
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Clark, I hope
this
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 message finds you well. I am writing to inform you that I have
the
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an
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 annual membership
of
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to
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Ella
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the Ella
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 Club and I have paid the membership
monthly
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fee monthly
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by
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with
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 my credit card. There were a lot of free benefits for annual membership holders
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, lile
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lile
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like
 free
coupon
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coupons
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of
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for
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 massage,
extra
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an extra
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 bonus for free coffee and tea and extended hours for annual members. Recently, I became informed that there is
additional
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 fee of 40$ plus tax
which
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 is unacceptable
and
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 I cannot afford it and no more
benefits
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benefits,
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 as you know.
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Consequently
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 I decided to leave
this
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 club
snd
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and
 move to another club which is affordable for me

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task
Be clear on facts. Say what kind of member you have, how you pay, what good you got, and why you leave.
structure
Put one idea in one paragraph. Start with the member and how you paid, then talk about the good parts, then give the reason to go.
format
Add a closing line like 'Yours sincerely' and your name.
language
Check mistakes and keep a formal tone.
content
The letter shows the main facts of the member and how you paid.
tone
There is a polite start in the letter.
argument
The reason to leave is clear.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual membership
  • monthly subscription
  • premium membership
  • direct debit
  • credit card payment
  • exclusive events
  • state-of-the-art facilities
  • networking opportunities
  • relocation
  • financial constraints
  • diversifying interests
  • expressing gratitude
  • amicable departure
  • future correspondence
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