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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their childern to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that childern going to single-sex schools have disadvantage later in life To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays
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 parents in many
of
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parts of the
world
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is
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are
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freely
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free
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 to pick what
school
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 their kids wanna go
is
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to, whether
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 it
conversional
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conventional
school
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 or even same
gender
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apply
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school
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. In my opinion many
downside
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downsides
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 aspects for
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children to
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to children
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 learn and
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study
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studying
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 at
this
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 type of
school
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.
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However
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However,
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 being able to focus on the
study
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 and not
knowing or
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being
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 involved in romantic relationships can be
the
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an
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advantages
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advantage
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.
Besides
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 the Advantages,
children
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that
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who
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study
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 in single sex schools can improve their academic
and
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performance and
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increasing
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increase
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the
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their
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self confident
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self-confidence
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,
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. This
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this
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my
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may
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be supported because the
environment
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school environment
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school
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, where the entire
student
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students
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 are
in
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of
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 one
gender
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. No competition with each
gender
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as
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, as
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 well as reducing the
gender
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 stereotypes. With only single-
gender
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school
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schools
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girls
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, girls
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 and boys feel less pressure worrying
the
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about the
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compare
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comparison
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 standard for each
gender
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.
For example
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, in
extracellular
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extracurricular
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 sports,
where
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apply
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boys will always be more dominant
rather
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apply
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than girls.
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, the disadvantages in society can be a major problem. Lack of confidence to communicate with different genders in the
world
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wide
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apply
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due to
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 the habit
in
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of
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 only
talks
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talking
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 with
same
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the same
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gender
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.
Moreover
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, many single-sex
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school
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schools
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 aren`t
prepare
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prepared
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the environment for
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for the environment
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students
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apply
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in
reality
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real-world
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world
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 conditions.
Furthermore
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, Narrow
world
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 wide,
while
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 the co-educational schools teach and learn the perspective of global genders, the lack of information in same
gender
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 schools can
effect
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affect
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 the
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children
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children's
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 social life
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such
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, such
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ass
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as
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gender
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 stereotypes, where the
children
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not
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do not
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knowing
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know
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the
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apply
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certain behaviours for each
gender
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 many disadvantages
for
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of
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 single-sex education
likewise
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limited
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limit
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 social interactions with
different
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the opposite
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 sex.
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However
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However,
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 there are still some advantages for
children
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 to
study
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 in
this
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 type of
school
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structure
Plan before you write. Make a short plan with a main idea for each paragraph and what example you will use.
grammar
Use simple, clear sentences. Check your spelling and verb form.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and then give a short example or reason.
coherence
Use linking words to show ideas: also, but, however, for example, in addition.
task response
Answer the task fully. Say how much you agree and give a short end comment.
content
You give both sides of the topic.
structure
There is an ending that sums up the view.
content
The idea to give an example is present.
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