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In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

Nowadays, some people disagree that family members have changed the structure and family role, which might occur
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 and world development. From my perspective, some of them are negative, some others are positive. On one hand, the roles of women in the family might have modified from housewife and caring for children at home to businesswomen.
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 by the financial situation of the family,
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 some mothers would like to maintain work skills, combined with taking part in house chores.
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, many countries support the equality of family members by organising parental leave for both father and mother for six months, which means they are able to share the role with each other.
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, some people believe that only females are able to take good care of children and household chores, and a family’s funds are a male responsibility.
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, the huge parts of duty in the family may create stress for members, as long as people have a large impact on the family’s life quality.
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 in the family are good templates for kids in the future. In conclusion, there is little doubt that what is best responsible of each member, many families optimise and enhance the suitable role for any situation in the family.

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coherence
Work on the flow of ideas. Use clear topic sentences and linking words so each paragraph has one main idea and a smooth link to the next.
structure
State your view clearly in the introduction and repeat it in the conclusion. This helps the reader see your position fast.
content
Give a real example or fact for each point and explain how it shows changes in family roles.
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Check grammar and word choice. Use simple, correct words and avoid hard phrases.
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The essay shows a clear idea of both good and bad changes.
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There is an example of parental leave as a factor in change.
structure
The writer uses an overall structure with introduction, body and conclusion.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income
  • gender roles
  • single-parent households
  • divorce rates
  • same-sex parents
  • multigenerational
  • family dynamics
  • aging population
  • communication technology
  • child-rearing approaches
  • work-life balance
  • remote working
  • family structure
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