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The graph below gives information about thr percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about thr percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
The line chart displays statistics about the percentage of
people
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 who live in four different Asian nations
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 the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and
Indonesia
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. Between 1970 and 2020, with predicted numbers of
people
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 by the year 2040.
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, all nations saw an increase in their numbers, but
Malaysia
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 experienced a dramatic rise over the shown period. And all countries will continue growing over the coming years. On the one hand, the
Philippines
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 and
Malaysia
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were
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had
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 relatively the highest shares of
people
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 in 1970, with around 30% and 29%, respectively, but
Malaysia
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 exceeded the
Philippines
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 in the next 50 years, with nearly 72%.
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, Thailand witnessed a gradual growth in its population in the first its decades, with almost 30%,
then
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 remained stable over the period,
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Indonesia
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 had the lowest proportion of population, with a small minority. By 2020, it ended up with the second highest among them, with just under
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half. The
Philippines
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' and
Indonesia
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's populations are predicted to increase in the next years, with almost 55% and just under 60%, respectively.
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 Thailand's population is projected to rise by 2040, with slightly under a half,
Indonesia
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's
people
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 will remain in its position, the
second,
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with nearly 60%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, philippines, malaysia, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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