Task1 the diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation

Task1 the diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation
IELTS Writing Task Chart for Task1 the diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation
The map below gives information about modifications in
student
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housing.
Overall
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,
while
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in 2010 years at the north
side
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there were various layouts,
however
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, in present there are only
student
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bedrooms. In 2010, at
first,
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there was a main entrance from the west
side
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, and opposite, there was a hallway. And the nearby path had two main separated
rooms
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, which were the
student
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's bedroom and a bathroom.
Additionally
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, on the east
side
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, there were other spaces which were one total learners' bedroom, their cooking area, and again a bedroom. When the footpath was located on the north
side
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, there was a
Gardenand aliving
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garden and a living
room. And
finally
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, on the north and south sides were Gardens. At present, the entrance has no change;
however
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, half of the path is en suite
rooms
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spaced. On the east
side
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, in the past, there were three layouts, and now it has no changes;
however
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, the kitchen has become a social area.
In addition
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, on the north
side
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, in the corner, there was a garden
,
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;
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now it has become
student
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rooms
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and other
rooms
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were replaced by
student
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bedrooms.
Finally
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, on the south
side
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, there is new car parking by replacing the garden
,
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;
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however
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, the garden on the north
side
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stayed unchanged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student, side, rooms with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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