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Some people believe that governments should invest more in public transportation systems, while others think that money should be spent on improving road infrastructure for private vehicles. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

On
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 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is transportation resources within countries. It is undeniable that without vehicles is challenging to commute
to
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the
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long distances and they have become an essential part of our
life
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lives
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.
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether governments should invest an income to transportation systems or should enhance the quality of road infrastructure for individuals with
own
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their own
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 transport. A commonly held belief is that not every human can afford
a transport
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transportation
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 for moving to various destinations. As evidence of
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this
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 they point to
different
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a different
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 lifestyle. It could be explained by the fact that there are plenty of people
,
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 who
impoverished
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are impoverished
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 and cannot even acquire an accommodation.
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, they
in
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are in
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 need of transportation in order to get to the place of employment.
On the other hand
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, some of them claim that roads are inconvenient, despite
of
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some spaces
,
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 where holes are enormous. Giving an illustration, they may declare that today's accountability of comfort is lowest. The explanation lies in the fact that in underdeveloped cities, in countries, roads are not
evolved
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developed
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 sufficiently.
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,
government
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the government
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 should
endeavor
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endeavour
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 for
residents'
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the residents'
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 convenience. In summary, taking everything into
account
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account,
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 I would claim that
government
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the government
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 has to amplify the quality of roads and
on
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, on
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 the
whole
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whole,
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 the comfort usage of any facilities, including buses and
etcetera
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etc.
, and
city's
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the city's
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 beauty. Regardless, is a human needy or prosperous
.
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 Everything should be equal and fair.

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content
Plan your essay: start with a short intro, then talk about one view, then the other, and finish with your own view.
structure
Link ideas with simple words like first, next, also, but, and finally.
grammar
Keep grammar simple and check the aim of verbs and small words.
vocabulary
Use common words and short, clear phrases.
examples
Give one clear example for each point to show you can argue.
task response
You state a view and give a short end line.
coherence
You talk about both sides of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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