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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
The pie chart and table illustrate key information about what kind of transport and cars are used in Edmonton. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the pie graph that
people
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 in Edmonton prefer to use cars more than any other transportation, reaching 45%. After that, in the second level,
people
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 use a light rail trans in the city, nearly 35%. Bus and taxi users hit a minimum percentage in the graph, nearly 15 per cent.
According to
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 what is shown in the table, there were many reasons for
people
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 using
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car
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 in Edmonton. The highest ratio going to individuals who commute to work reached 55%.
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, working in the business area has a big effect on why
people
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 use their private car nearly 45%.
Next,
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taking children to school represents 40%. Later on, shopping and leisure activities have the lowest ratio in
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 diagram, approximately 15 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • public transportation
  • cultural attitudes
  • electric vs. traditional vehicles
  • peak hours
  • environmental implications
  • economic factors
  • socio-economic divide
  • technological advancements
  • public policy
  • environmental awareness
  • urban development
  • air quality
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • government initiatives
  • community actions
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