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Modern technology is now used in almost every workplace. Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Today
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technology
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 is used in almost every workplace. Computers
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 internet
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 machines have changed the way people do their jobs. In my
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view,
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 has made work faster and easier
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 it
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 has some disadvantages if we depend on it too much. At
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technology
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 has improved communication. In the past
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 could only share information by letters or face-to-face meetings.
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people can use email
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 chat apps to connect with their friends even if they are far away.
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 many international companies can manage teams in different countries thanks to online tools.
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 makes work more productive. Many boring or repetitive tasks can be done by machines or computer programs
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 saves time and reduces mistakes.
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 gives workers more chances to focus on creative or important activities.
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 there are some problems with relying too much on
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. If the internet or a computer system stops working
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 whole office may not be able to continue. Cyberattacks are
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 a risk for companies. Another problem is that some jobs are disappearing because machines can do the same work more cheaply and quickly.
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factories
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 many workers have been replaced by robots.
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technology
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 all the time can reduce personal contact between employees
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 may harm teamwork and relationships. In
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conclusion,
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technology
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 has changed the workplace in many positive ways
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 as faster communication and greater efficiency.
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However
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 it can
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 bring problems like job loss
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 failures
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 less human interaction
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 of
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people
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 should use
technology
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 wisely and not forget the importance of human skills.

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