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Band 4

Countries should produce enough food for their own population and import as little as possible. Do you agree or disagree with this statemen

The world has changed greatly in the
prvious
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previous
 years, especially when it comes to
food
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production
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. Many people think that governments should focus on
food
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production
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 only for their
countries
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 and try to avoid importing
food
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 as much as possible. I
partialy
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partially
 agree with that idea.
This
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 will explain my point of view about
complete
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the complete
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production
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 of
food
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 and
import
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 as little as possible.
Enoughf
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Enough
production
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 of
food
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 by the
country
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 itself
,
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 will ensure a sufficient supply of
food
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 for the population at a steady
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prices
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price
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.
Its
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 obvious that people from
differnt
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different
 socioeconomic
status
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statuses
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 can enjoy eating without the worries of paying expensive
prices
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.
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, when the
prices
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 of
food
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pruducts
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products
 are
cmpared
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compared
 at supermarkets, local
products
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 are definitely sold at more reasonable
prices
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, compared with imported
products
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. Another reason that
encourage
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encourages
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 governments to produce
food
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 and make importation of
food
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 very limited is creating job
apportunities
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opportunities
 for their
popultation
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population
. Jobs will be
availabe
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available
at
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in
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 different fields
like
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, like
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 agricultural and industrial fields
for
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, for
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 the young generation of the
country
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.
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turn
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 will enhance the economy of the
country
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 and make it stronger.
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, it is not possible for all
countries
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 to produce
food
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 for the all population. As some
countries
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 are suffering from
limitation
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 of natural resources.
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 limitation may result in
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 fact that importing certain
food
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products
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 is more
benefitial
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beneficial
 for the government and the consumer. For
exaple
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example
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countries
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, countries
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 with no coastline have
limitation
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limitations
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of
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on
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 seafood
products
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. In conclusion, it is more
benefitial
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beneficial
 for the
popultation
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population
 and the economy of the
country
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 to produce
food
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 and import limited
stuff
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goods
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.
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, it isn't always possible to produce all
products
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by
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from
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 their own natural resources.

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task response
State your view in the intro. Say clearly if you agree or not from the start.
task response
Give more clear examples to back each idea and explain how they help.
language
Fix common grammar and spelling. This makes your point clear.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro, 2–3 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Use link words like and, but, also, therefore to join ideas.
overall
You show real talk about the topic and give reasons.
overall
There are simple examples that help show your point.
overall
You keep to the topic and do not stray far.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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