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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Many people believe that the
abortion
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 rate has
been
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increased over the past few years because of the unplanned
occurence
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occurrence
 of
pregnancy
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 ,
whereas
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 other says it should not be permitted . In my opinion , it should be legal as it is the sole decision of parents to have a baby . On the one hand ,
The
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 downside of termination is its being brutal towards an embryo
as
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 it is a process of killing a living being . It has
a
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numerous side effects on one 's body
which
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 ,
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however
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however,
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complicates
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complicate
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 the later
pregnancy
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 and
leads
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lead
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 to chronic health issues .
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 , it arises serious conditions
such
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 as Infertility and hormonal imbalance . There should be a
legitmate
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legitimate
 time period appointed for
abortion
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which
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, which
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 is the first trimester of
pregnancy
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other
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; other
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 than that, it should be illegal. In
this
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 intellectual society , it is the right of
married
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a married
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 couple to abort their infant if they
conceived
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conceive
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 unwillingly . Couples became career-oriented
which
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, which
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 is the primary reason
of
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for
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 not planning a baby . It not only
,
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distract
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distracts
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 their focus but
also
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 , they would have
limited
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limits
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time
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their time
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 for themselves . Life will
crevolve
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revolve
 around their baby , so some individuals are most likely to undergo
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abortion
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an abortion
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which
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, which
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 is completely their own will .
For instance
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 , the Contraceptive failure leading to
pregnancy
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which
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, which
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 tends to abort . In conclusion ,
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Although
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although
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abortion
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 is the idea of terminating
lived
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living
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ones
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beings
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,
but
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giving birth should only depend upon parents . By making it an illegal act in society , it
pressurizes
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pressures
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 young
ones
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people
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.

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task response
Try to add strong, clear reasons for each point and give real or clear examples to back them. Make sure your view is stated at the end.
coherence
Use simple connect words to show link. For example, First, Next, However, Therefore, in conclusion. Keep one idea per paragraph and make a clear flow.
content
You share both sides and give your own view.
content
You show you know the topic and try to give reasons.
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